My dream
predict the future can be difficult. there are many famous predictions that came true. i’m jack, my dream is i have a robot named superman. he can help me clean the room, do the chores. and he can play with me. he help with the house work and do the most unpleasant jobs and things.
i think my dream will come true in the future!
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1. predict the future can be difficult. 改為 predicting the future can be difficult.
2. i’m jack, my dream is i have a robot named superman. 改為 i’m jack, my dream is to have a robot named superman.
3. he help with the house work and do the most unpleasant jobs and things. 改為he can help with the house work and do the most unpleasant jobs and things.
4.作者對(duì)自己夢(mèng)想充滿信心,敘述連貫,語(yǔ)言流暢。