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　　Are Stars Justified to Obtain High Incomes?

　　Are you aware of an expanding group of TV alcoholics emerging among your peers, or so called sofa potatoes, enjoying channel surfing, fascinated by star pursuing, chewing up gossips in the circle? The unparallel boom of entertainment and sports industry serves as the best example of the endurable rule;demands create markets, and markets ensure incomes.

　　The prosperity of entertainment and sports circles was, actually, hard to imagine in the old days when dramatists were debased to low status and athletes were fed on no more than spiritual grains.  However,  the opening policy utterly transformed people＇s lifestyle by providing rich abundance of bread and warm clothes. Therefore, more and more lay people no longer felt content with material wealth, and their desire to fulfill both material and spiritual needs creates the market, which is part of the reason for the stars＇ high income.

　　In contrast with ordinary professions like nurses, doctors and teachers, a higher admission threshold is laid in the entertainment and sports circles. A charming face, elegant manner,strong constitution are indispensable qualities when an ambitious young man dreams about carving a name or at least making alivlng in this field. Due to the high cost to turn an innocent beauty into an fascinating film star, high incomes are charged to make up for his or her diligence and pressure suffered in this cruelly competitive circle. What＇s more, it takes the most precious time in their whole life. How can a pop star count on an ever-lasting career to support all the rest of his or her life? Energy fading away, brilliance never dazzles again.  The day is bound to come when fame and fortune say goodbye to those pitiable out-of-date stars. In a word, their present high incomes may be set aside for future use. Therefore, the profession must be lucrative.

　　Another fact also lends credence to this seemingly unfair phenomenon. Not confined to their own profession, those fasbionable stars explore various approaches to enlarge their bank notes, which, in effect, bring about some positive side effects.Say, the high frequency of exposure to various media earns these pop stars a mass of passionate and loyal fans, whereas, their enduring support, on the contrary, adds to the chance of charging an ideal transferal fee when hopping to another club or company.On the other hand, modern citizens are eager to find a vent to release their working stress and the excitement in watching a sport game provides another ingredient for stars＇ popularity and high incomes. One partes demand always results in another＇s considerable benefits.

　　Admittedly, the expanding boom of these two industries proves their social value and the necessity of their existence, but

　　that is not to say other ordinary professions are of less value. After all, the society＇s basic mechanism is built up by those less eye catching group, who try to satisfy people＇s physical and mental needs;such as curing disastrous diseases, providing universal education. A career＇s inner value, however, can never be measured by secular banknotes. One is superficial, the other is profound;one is short termed, the other is long-lasting, neither can replace the other while both beautify people＇s daily life.

　　At last, stars are justified to obtain high incomes because there＇s not a fair scale available to make such a comparison. Every phenomenon has its reason to survive. We need sports and entertainment, therefore we pay for them, and that＇s it.

　　簡  評

　　這是一篇議論娛樂圈的高額薪酬的文章，整篇文章在表達和論述上不乏幾處閃光點，如第一句的引文就比較有新意：“Are you aware Of an expanding group Of TV—alcoholics emerging among your peers，Or sO—called sofa potatoes，enjoying channel surfing，fascinated by star—pursuing，chewing gossips ln the circle?"自然導入文章的中心句“Demands create markets，whereas markets ensure incomes.又如，“A career＇s inner value，however，can

　　never be measured by secular banknotes，just like any noble courses never being rewarded with bonus.”(Para.Six)這個觀點本身提得很好，這是文章的可取之處。

　　但通篇文章缺少一個貫穿全文的主線。雖說“Demands create markets，and markets ensure incomes.”看似文章的中心句，但整個論述并沒有圍繞這一點展開，論說過程缺少層次感和條理性，看起來倒像東一筆，西一筆，想到哪兒，寫到哪兒。第二段和第

　　五段似乎在講人們的需要創造了這個市場，但并未重點展開論述，又夾在兩條不相關的信息中間，因此沒有說服力。

　　論說文首先是要有一條主線，即中心要明確。在展開論述時一定要思路清晰，條理分明，選擇最有說服力的論據。論據不宜過多，太多就分散了讀者的注意力，論述也可能顯得空乏無力，選擇兩三點進行較深入透徹的展開，緊扣主題信息，展開論述。同時可以使用一些過渡詞，或疑問、倒裝句式等來加強文章的層次感，強化立場，豐富文章的表達，這樣文章會更具有可讀性。

　　(點評教師：盧愛華)